thoughts run like the river
slogging
rolling over and
under
sunlight
d
a
n
c
e
s
like
*stars*
stolen from the
night sky
voyeur eyes
watch
~lovers~
on the levee
sipping wine
munching cheese
kissing
with red-stained lips
tasting
of aged oak casks
& the scent of
mothers milk
on their
breath
Charlotte Hamrick 
I really like the way you manipulate line length and layout on this one. I’ve been thinking a lot about the line lately too.
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Thanks, Nathan. Although I had morel line/work manipulation when I wrote it on Word but it didn’t paste to WordPress the same. “Dancing” was on a diagonal but I couldn’t get it to do that on WP. Frustrating. Any tips?
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This poem dances on the page, especially the word “dances”. I love “stars stolen from the night sky”…..love the way the poem flows, appears and what it says. Lovely images.
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Vivid piece…nicely done.
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Blissful solitude; nice place to be 🙂
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The words and use of layout are both terrific.
I use Blogger so am unable to advise on laying out via WordPress, however, you could consider other ways to display your work, to have the layout to your choosing. How about making your poem into a picture? You could use a simple drawing application, or make a collage and photograph or scan it and upload it as an image instead of words.
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Good ideas, Mavis, thanks!
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Zouxzoux,
I loved the strong romantic feel throughout this poem.
I could taste the oak aged wine too!
Absolutely beautiful…
Best wishes, Eileen 🙂
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